If the bike represents Paul, and Newton is the one who enables Paul to move forward, then Newton must be a wheel. I began to wonder what would happen if Paul’s metaphorical “wheel” (Newton) also disappeared?
Wow. Big plot twist this week.
ARRRGGHHH. I think I may have killed it. And not in the good way.
In an attempt to make Newton less of a cookie cutter buddy, I’ve completely rewritten his character. Which meant rewrites to Paul’s dialogue. I guess the good news is that it is three pages shorter.
Start on page two of the script, I’ve made changes throughout, although some of it is still familiar.
Here ya go – freshly tweaked throughout – The Wheel – Draft Four.
As an added bonus – dedicated to my peer group for suggesting the alternate second-to-last scene, which surprisingly I think a prefer – The Wheel – Draft Four Alternate Ending.
Suggestions? Comments? Which pre-ending do you like: the scene between Kali and Paul, or the one with Kali and Newton?
Cutting it close to the deadline – here is the complete, as yet untweaked…The Wheel – Complete Third Draft
If you’ve been reading along religiously (of course you have, right?), then begin on page 9 of the PDF (which is page 8 of the screenplay).
Last week’s partial third draft of The Wheel, that’s what (which, really, because of th re-write, is more like a first draft in places).
The fully completed third draft will be posted this week on Thursday.
Last Friday, the second draft of The Wheel was workshopped in my scriptwriting class. Which was great, really. Lots of fabulous ideas and suggestions bandied about. Except…well, let me put it to you this way:
Second draft. Still toying with motives and fine-tuning characters.
Hmmm…the full first draft. Crappy and inconsistent.
Previously on “The Wheel”…
My instructor warned us fledgling playwrights, “Writing a screenplay is harder than it looks.”
In my continuing effort to obtain my official artist pedigree (BFA), this fall I am enrolled in an academic course at ECU.